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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Lifeguard (11/09/06)

TITLE: Becoming a Lifeguard
By thadd presley
11/13/06


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That life guard, Oh that man, how could he be the person that watches over this beach? I don’t think he could watch a kiddy pool, even an empty one. I’m only twelve years old; and, perhaps I’m not the smartest person in the world, but I’ve watched Bay Watch and this is not what lifeguards are supposed to do. Every time I come down here, I see him reading. Now, how can he effectively watch all the swimmers and save drowning people with a book in his face? Remind me not to swim here, that’s all I ask. If I ever swim on this beach, I always go to the southern part where my favorite life guard is on post every weekend. He is cute and he is watchful and he never reads or takes his eyes off the water. But, when I want to walk and enjoy the day, I come to this part of the beach, which is more north than my mother likes me to wander, but the water is so blue here and the sand is the whitest. It makes me so relaxed. Just, if it weren’t for that lifeguard; it would be perfect.
As I walked this day, kicking the sand with my bare feet, I saw that the beach was almost empty, as usual, and the only person in the water was a woman with a child. I wasn’t too concerned for the child because it was on a float; but, being scared of the sea in general, I noticed that the child didn’t have arm floats on; and, knowing about the tides and undertow, I knew, that if it ever fell off the float it would be in danger. But, I’m not the life guard here, so what can I do?
I probably walked twenty more feet when I heard the lady scream, causing a chill to course my spine, and I looked in her direction. Just as I thought might happen, the child had fallen into the ocean and was no where to be seen. I jumped nearly out of my skin and looked to the tower where the reader -- um, lifeguard -- was no where to be found. I thought then that I would have to do this myself. I was going to have to help the woman. So, turning back toward the sea, I started running.
Then, surprised, I saw the lifeguard twenty feet in front of me, already in the water, jumping the waves, getting the mother at a very fast pace. Once there, he found the child and brought them both to shore quickly. The child did not need resuscitated; but, the mother, who needed to be calmed down, took a moment to herself and breathed oxygen from a tank. After the mother regained her composure, she kissed the man many times on the cheek, causing him to blush. But, when all was set right the lifeguard made his way back to his tower.
I gave the life guard time to calm down and then went over to him. He closed the book he had started reading and climbed down the latter to me. I told him how amazed I was at how fast he had gotten to her and asked how he knew she was in danger. “You are a savior,” I told him.
At this, he put his hand on my shoulder and said, “No, darling, there is only one Savior.” He showed me the book he had been reading all those days and I was surprised to see it was the Bible. I hugged the lifeguard and told him that I would swim here from now on.


I went back home that day, which was a Saturday, and got ready to go to church the next morning. Once I got to the church, I decided to stay upstairs with the adults and not attend the youth class. I wasn’t surprised when the preacher started talking about Jesus and how he was our Savior and that we all have to be saved to get to heaven. But, he when said it was our job to help people find their way to Christ, I listened a little more closely. “Imagine," the pastor said, "you are a lifeguard and someone you know is drowning. What would you do? Wouldn‘t you do anything you could to save those people from death?”

I left church that day as a lifeguard for Jesus.


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Joanne Sher 11/19/06
A great message here. Dividing your story into more paragraphs, and spacing them out, would make this a bit more readable. I love the "coincidence" of the lifeguard sermon.
Marilee Alvey11/20/06
You've got an imagination and the talent to carry it out to hungry readers. You do need to break up your paragraphs to be more reader friendly. Also,there are a few grammatical errors, but those can easily be fixed. Keep writing! I'll look forward to more imaginative tales from you!
Marilyn Schnepp 11/21/06
Desperately needs paragraphing in order to make it "reader friendly"; but keep on trying...practice makes perfect eventually. Good luck and God Bless.
Phyllis Inniss 11/23/06
No need repeating what the reviewers before said, except yours was a creative way of sending your message. Good job.