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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Doctor/Nurse (11/02/06)

TITLE: WHEN MARY SPIT ON ME
By Marilee Alvey
11/02/06


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Mary spit on me in October, 1998. She was my mother’s roommate. Like the leaves falling from the trees outside her nursing home window, mom was withering. A vicious animal, cancer, had mom in its jaws, shaking her violently, toying with her before slinging her aside with a victorious snarl.

I had no love lost on Mary. Every day, hour after hour, minute after minute, Mary would sit, bent over, in her wheelchair. Her wheelchair had a tray built into it so that Mary could, I suppose, keep from putting her head in her own lap. Every day, in fact, every minute, she would take a corner of her gingham housecoat, spit on it and wipe off the tray. Over and over, day after day, always muttering something as she worked. I thought to myself, “Surely, this must be Hell.” My Hell was watching mom die. I didn’t want to have to watch Mary’s Hell, too.

I hated that Mary was mom’s roommate. I wanted better for mom. I thought Mary was beneath her. Although mom seemed too far gone mentally, I wasn’t. There was so little that I could do for mom anymore, but this I could do. I marched straight into the office that October day for a one person rage fest.

“Hi. I’m the daughter of Myrtle Martin in room 207 and I’m here to say that I want my mother moved out of that room IMMEDIATELY!”

“May I ask why?” the secretary asked, her eyes straining to read some figures on her computer.

“She’s depressing. My mom doesn’t need that. Also, when I leaned over to try to speak to her on her level, she spit on me.”

“So soon? Well, you should feel privileged.”

“Excuse me?”

“Long ago, Mary was a nurse who worked in this very nursing home. After she retired, she kept coming in as a volunteer. Then, nine years ago she suffered a stroke. She’s been here ever since. In her mind, she’s disinfecting the place. She spit on you because she wanted to keep you from getting germs. She’s obviously quite fond of you. She really is a dear little lady.”

“Well, in an alternate universe, that might make sense. Spitting to avoid germs. Sure. However, I’m not putting up with this for my mother. I want her moved by tomorrow or I’ll take her somewhere else,” I said as I turned on my heels and walked out, head held high. It’s hard to watch your mom leave you, piece by piece. I was so angry at God that I wanted to take a baseball bat and play some midnight baseball with all of my neighbors’ pumpkins.

As I walked back toward room 207 I practiced my words of reassurance to my mother. As her protector, I would promise her that she wouldn’t have to deal with this woman again. We might not have power over the cancer, but Mary was a cinch.

As I turned into the doorway, I saw them, together. My mom sat right where I left her, in the corner. Mary, however, had somehow managed to scoot her wheelchair in the small space between the bed and the chair. Because she had her back turned to me, I couldn’t see what she was doing. Silently I crept in, walking up closely behind Mary, planning to get more evidence. When I got up close, I peered over her shoulder and saw Mary’s hand had, momentarily, freed itself its gingham housecoat prison and was now resting on the back of mom’s hand. She was, in her feeble way, patting mom’s hand. Something urged me on as I strained to listen in to her mumbling.

“De ta ta ta. De ta ta ta.,” she cooed softly and reassuringly. My mother looked up at me for an instant and I saw a tear run down her cheek. Her mind had pulled out of its fog, coaxed out by the devotion and service of a tiny, pretzel bent lady.

“Oh, honey,” mom said, sighing, looking at me directly. My throat ached with words I could not form. Salty tears ran down my face and onto my lips. Jesus had entered the room. I knew it and I knew mom knew it. There were no words that could express it, then, or now.

I humbly walked back into the office. “I’d like to withdraw my request,” I managed to squeak out.

“Good decision,” the secretary said quietly with a knowing smile.


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Andrea Hargrove11/09/06
Very touching. I can very clearly picture your MC's embarrassment as she asked to withdraw her request.
Dan Louise Mann11/09/06
Nice reminder of how Jesus can be found in unexpected places if we would only tune in. Good story that kept me reading.
Glorey Wooldridge11/10/06
This is a wow article - one that touched me deeply and I cried as I read it because of the care shown by Mary to her ability. If you have ever sat by the bedside of a loved one dying - things become pitotal and time seems to stop as you endure and embrace every moment you have. To have seen the tender love and for your mom to have had the privilege of this is a gift. Thanks for sharing....well done
Carol Maresca11/10/06
I loved this article! If I were putting a devotional together, I would surely contact you. Your description is perfect. I too worked in and volunteered at a nursing home. It is also a place where the Lord Jesus makes His rounds daily, hourly...
You've written about it -
Thank you

Carol M.
Betty Castleberry11/12/06
This is very good. It's the kind of piece you want to read more than once. In fact, I did! It's touching, and has a message as well.
Jan Ackerson 11/13/06
Just beautiful, so tender and touching. I loved it.
dub W11/13/06
The title grabbed me, the story sucked me in. This is very well written.
Joanne Sher 11/13/06
What a heart-wrencher! Your details are so vivid and real, and I was engrossed from beginning to end (both of which, by the way, were masterful!). Exceptionally well done!
david grant11/13/06
I'm glad I read this. It reminded me my own mother's death, and the strange and wonderful people I sometimes met on my trips to nursing homes. Great title. Good lead. Good emotion in the body of the story. The ending was a little short, but by that time I was already sold on your story.
This is a DAVE's Fav and gets an ethusiastic DAVEY from me. Thank you for the great hint that brought me here.
David Story11/13/06
Moving.
Grabbed at my heart's strings and now won't let go. The image will stay with me for the night.
Thanks.
Sara Harricharan 11/14/06
Awesome entry. This was great, I'm glad I finally got the chance to read it. You did an excellent job, especially with the vividness of your characters. I loved the end.
lynn rodgers11/15/06
makes me think of that verse(i forgot the reference) where jesus is telling his disiples to take care of widows, orphans, sick, and dying, the prisoners, ect. and anything they do for the least of these they do for him.
fantastic
julie wood11/15/06
I loved this story all the way through--delightful, vivid descriptions and imagery as well as a beautiful message! My favorite imagery was of the irate narrator wanting to play "midget baseball" with her neighbors' pumpkins...an original expression of anger.

I could especially relate to this story because I volunteer at two nursing homes and have found there some delightfully eccentric yet wonderful friends.
Todd Tribble11/15/06
Nicely done. It was moving, thought provoking, and I could see the action happening in front of me. Good job.
Edy T Johnson 11/16/06
This is such powerful writing, you left me sobbing at reading that wonderful ending. You are headed for my "favorites" collection! I also want to say how much I appreciate your kind and generous comment on my "Guardian Angels" story. Thank you. You write so very well.
Julianne Jones11/17/06
This was very moving and well written. Keep writing. :) Jules
william price11/19/06
Wow!! Such honest writing. This story could create a new challenge criteria. "How well the story involved the readers heart".
Very nice job.
God bless.


   
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