The Official Writing Challenge
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From what I've read so far today, this is out of the box. Nice take on the topic. Jimmy's letter showed the life of a missionary and it was a joy to read.

Keep up the great work, writing for the glory of HIM!
10/31/06
You did a great job with this. The letter really helped the reader see and experience the country. One thing I did stumble over was the use of James and Martha's names so much. You might try substituting husband or wife/he or she or just leaving them out in places. I know I don't call my husband Ron every time I talk to him (smile). Also noticed you used "sung" and the word should be "sang." I enjoyed your story and it kept my attention very well. Blessings~~
11/01/06
This is a neat device, putting your story in the words of a letter, introduced by the receivers. The only correction I noticed to suggest: quotation marks need to begin each paragraph of the letter the mother is reading, so we know the letter continues. Other than that minor addition, this is very well done.
11/01/06
Good job sharing the life of a missionary with a letter for the vehicle of writing.
11/01/06
This was a creative story! I loved how you used a missionary's letter, makes me wish I knew what the next letter would say! ;)
I like this account of a missionary "on the job." Your last snetence was fatastic. I also liked the reference to the lizards. It added a touch of whimsy and made this young man's mission seem real.
This is a well-written story. I liked your portrayal of the arents, eager for news from their son. It seemed like an honest picture of missionary life as well. Keep up the great writing!
11/01/06
I loved this story and could identify with the parents who raised this exceptional son. Tonight I watched a video of my son (who is, by the way, a very strong Christian) singing in a talent show. He was incredible. However, all he did, all he accomplished in that show has been put into proper prospective with this simple letter (nice device!) showing the heart of a young missionary. It was a nice reminder of what is most important. Your story shows a young man making a difference in the lives of others as he learns and grows. It was well told and very much enjoyed!
11/02/06
Super job. I enjoyed your story very much. God bless.