The Official Writing Challenge
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I don't know about anyone else, but, I'm very confused about where this story was going...or even what it was about. Try narrowing down your topic choice to one story. It almost feels like you were trying to follow several stories within the one--that's hard to do with such a limited amount of words. Keep on writing, I enjoyed your style--but try to narrow your ways of approaching your article.