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Touching. Wonderful writing, loved the dialogue. Realistic too. Only one suggestion: spacing between the paragraphs makes it easier for online readers. Thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work.
The emotions from both of your characters are very real, and the dialog quite realistic. I hesitated a bit at the end--as a person intimately familiar with spinal cord injuries, I doubt that a person so completely paralyzed that he needs a respirator would have enough movement in his hands even to gently squeeze. Unless you intended it as a miracle, because he had chosen to forgive? That concern aside, it was a touching and moving story.
A truly touching article. The emotion the cop showed was convincing, moving from toughness to a feeling of remorse and the dialogue put the past action into perspective. You did a good job with this.
Great story. Very realistic with a wonderful ending. Well done!