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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Fire-fighter (10/05/06)

TITLE: K.O.H.F.D.
By Benjamin Graber
10/10/06


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Was it pride or was it fear
That caused a tremor in my heart
When the badge was pinned upon my chest?

K.O.H.F.D.—
“Kingdom Of Heaven Fire Department”—
My life now dedicated to fighting the fires of hate—

I’ve been burned
Trying to stamp out fires
In my human insecurity,
But when I spray the flames
With the Holy Spirit’s quenching power

Only God knows what miracles will take place…

I stumble along in a feeble attempt
To walk by faith,
Trying to use a hose that could destroy me,
But in spite of my blunders,
The Captain sends me to the front—

See the flames disappear!
Watch the fire extinguished!
See the hearts once torn
Bound together in love…

“Blessed are the peacemakers”—
Somehow, in my novice attempts
At fighting a fire I could not quench,

The fire now backs away,
The Spirit vanquishes hate—

…And I am called a son of God…


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Everest Alexander10/12/06
Catchy title! Interesting piece! Keep writing!
Linda Watson Owen10/13/06
Yes, a creative approach to the topic for sure. You've put your reader right in this 'fire fighter's' shoes. I would change 'Watch the fire extinguished!' to present tense to avoid the tense shift in that section. Overall good job! Keep writing!
Kaylee Blake 10/15/06
Very good. I loved the opening stanza. Really held my interest the whole way through. Also liked how the person's feeble attempts were used by God to extinguish the fire. Keep up the good work.
Donna Emery10/16/06
This is good because it is something that every believer can relate to. You have shown how we all can be used by Him. Well done!
David (The Goliath Assassin)05/09/07
Good. Glad to see someone's keeping things under control back home. If my campaign allows a safe return, I will be in need of a restful countryside to return to. (Tugs at his gauntlet.)
David (The Goliath Assassin)10/10/07
I liked this one Ben. You're probably used to hearing that from me by now. It's like that, man. God's will can be done through you requardless of your ability.
What I connected with was the conflict between Pride and Fear in the first stanza. For you, it seems like just a matter of confusion between two good feelings. Perhaps you are not one who is normally given to Pride. Therefore, Pride would only come across to you as a good thing.
But take it from somebody boastful like me: it only takes a couple solid rebukes from your peers to turn self-pride into a source of fear all its own!


   
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