The Official Writing Challenge
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10/13/06
Really enjoyed reading your thoughts. Extremely motivational!
Yes, wonderful thoughts on this topic. I'd leave out the words 'would' in a couple lines towards the beginning and just use the present tense to help enliven those lines. Watch the spelling of 'blare'. I enjoyed reading this poem. Good job!
10/17/06
Almost passed this by. I liked the flow of this, and as said before watch conditional tenses. The rhymes didn't seem forced and worked throughout the poem. Nice work.
10/23/06
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