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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)

TITLE: She Never Stopped
By Tamara Rodrigues
09/07/06


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Each morning, a woman would set out to tend her garden. Feeling the earth between her fingers brought comfort and peace.

This garden grew from a few plants and bushes to one that included ponds, themes, and lights. All dug by hand, planted by hand, picked by hand.

Each and every day the woman would work from sun up to sun down. She would water and weed, feed and seed.

She created walkways, even made her own stones out of molds and cement. She places benches and a hammock where one could rest and take in the beauty.

Others marveled at her handiwork. Her devoted prowess as a gardener. She would beam for a moment and then find something wrong and rush off to take care of it. Her friends would walk through the garden paths admiring all they saw.

Look at those roses, that thyme. The goldfish, my how they have grown. Wow, how many bull frogs are here now? Listen to them, sounds like a rubber band band.

She would talk about the painstaking time spent in the garden. The money spent when the filter died in the pond. How hard it was to make the cement and pour it.

She never realized that she needed to take time to spend in her garden. She never enjoyed the fruit of her labor. To see the beauty she had created with seeds and Godís loving touch.

She never sat on her benches or lay in the hammock.

How sad, God opened her yard to the wonders of His beauty, but she never enjoyed it.

When you walk in the gardens of life, take time to stop and smell the flowers. God created them for you to enjoy.


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Rhonda Clark 09/17/06
I like your message here of how we should, "stop and smell the roses," that we should enjoy life more than we do.

On the other hand, I had trouble connecting with your story. I understand you wanted to keep this generic, but if you lead had been given a name, it would have made it more personal.

Another place I became lost was where the garden visitors were making comments. Using quotes and showing the shifting pov would have helped.

Overall, this piece makes a great point and I liked it. :)
Cheryl Harrison 09/17/06
Good idea here. With a little work it could be one of those quick read children's books that has lots of illustrations in it. Keep writing.
Joanne Sher 09/17/06
Enjoyed the point of this story - I also agree it would be more engaging with a named main character. Wonderful message though - definitely made me think! Thanks for writing!