The Official Writing Challenge
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09/07/06
Nice job. I knew this was about a runaway slave, but you spun it with a different ending. Good descriptions and direct dialog. Keep up the good work. God bless.
09/10/06
Like previously mentioned, I didn't expect the ending. Sometimes in order to make a nice story we might feel the need to leave the hard stuff out. You didn't. I appreciate that. Wonderful ending. Blessings, Reflectons
09/10/06
Very creative, awesome ending. Be careful of switiching from past to present tense. You did a great job with the suspense.
09/10/06
I definitely didn't expect the ending either - you pulled it off very well! I love the juxtaposition of the two different rivers! Your description was also very, very vivid.
09/10/06
I was picturing a family going west. I didn't clue into the runaway till the dogs started baying. I was glad to see you didn't leave her dying in the first river, but I enjoyed seeing her crossing the final river. Good work.
09/10/06
Very stirring and well-written story. I was caught up in the drama from beginning to end. Very good!
09/12/06
Fiction doesn't usually tug at my heartstrings, but this one did. Nice job. Kudos.
09/13/06
Really sad. It almost made me cry in the end. But at the same time it's happy (if that makes any sense). I thought it was a good idea, and, overall, a good peice. It could use some smoothing out, but I think all stories could use that. Also I was somewhat confused, especially during the beginning. But I thought it was a real sweet story.
09/13/06
A compelling story with a wonderful ending. Other than the shift in tenses this was very nicely written. Great job!
09/14/06
Congratulations on your "Highly Commended" win! God bless you as you continue to grow in your gifts and talents! Very, very well done ... wonderfully written!
Congrats! I love the ending of this piece. Keep writing.
09/15/06
What a gripping piece - no wonder it placed. Congrats.