The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/06
Wow. Powerful. Moving. Misty-eyeing. I loved this. Wonderfully written. Keep uup the awesome work!
09/13/06
What I like- This story was packed with emotion - very realtistic. I stopped on the title as it caught my eye- good one! I liked the names you used and how the boy recognized Jesus. Good writing.
What I might change - take a look at some of your punctuation around the dialogue. Otherwise - I loved the ending too!