The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/06
This was good, but I want more. More detail, more information, more descriptions. This has the potential to be a really great piece.
09/10/06
Yowsers, I loved this! The river at the beginning was metaphorical, right, and your readers realize it at the moment when the narrator is reunited with her child...awesome.
09/10/06
Definitely I wanted more!!!! Such a wonderful metaphoric description of the separation between a mother and her missing daughter, then exhibited by tears. Tell us what happened before and after too!! Inquiring minds want to know!!!
09/13/06
This was an excellent episode, and it described the emotions of the mother so well. Very well done. Keep writing and sharing!
09/13/06
I'd suggest you lengthen this piece - it's potential is so much greater with the fantastic start you gave it. Great twist. You've got the meat now give it some more flavor! Great job. Jo
10/27/06
I hope you do not mind a better-late-than-never comment on this wonderful essay. This now has to be one of my favorite pieces since I've been a member here. It incorporates all that I would ever hope to have in a story. It has depth, emotion, skill, imagery. Excellent job. I am very impressed. I'm glad I found this. God bless.