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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Melody (08/24/06)

TITLE: A Song In Her Head
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08/30/06


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There’s within my heart a melody, Jesus whispers sweet and low…

Laura rubbed her temples, trying to ignore the tune playing in her head. She didn’t feel much like singing this morning, joyfully or otherwise; the imminent surgery to remove her cancerous left kidney was in the forefront of her mind.

Fear not, I am with thee, peace, be still, in all of life’s ebb and flow.

“I’m not feeling very peaceful right now, Lord.” As a matter of fact, she was downright angry. After everything she had been through in the past couple of years, the death of her brother, a bitter divorce, Laura had had enough. She stuffed the remaining items into her overnight bag and zipped it up.

This was the last thing she needed right now. The bills were piling up as it was since Jordan left and Michael had just started college. And cancer, of all things… “Oh Lord, why me? Why now?”

Though sometimes He leads through waters deep, trials fall across the way…

“What more do you want from me?” Tears streaming down her face, Laura fell to her knees. “I can’t do this, Lord Jesus. I feel so alone.”

Though sometimes the path seems rough and steep, see his footprints all the way.

She remembered her agony as she watched her brother pass away, and how the Lord had led her to the Psalms. Desperate for His comfort once again, Laura opened her bible and began to read.

“Hear my cry, O God; Give heed to my prayer. From the end of the earth I call to You when my heart is faint; Lead me to the rock that is higher than I. For You have been a refuge for me, A tower of strength against the enemy. Let me dwell in Your tent forever; Let me take refuge in the shelter of Your wings.”

Feasting on the richness of His grace, resting neath His sheltering wing…

Laura closed her bible. He had gotten her through every trial she had had to face in the past; she knew He would get her through this one. Feeling more lighthearted than she had in a long time, she slung her bag over her shoulder, tucked her bible under her arm, and headed out the door.

A slow smile began as the song continued playing in her mind and she couldn’t help but sing along.

Jesus, Jesus, Jesus, sweetest name I know, fills my every longing, keeps me singing as I go.

Scripture reference: Psalm 61: 1-4 (NASB). Song title “There’s Within My Heart A Melody” by Luther B. Bridges (1884-1948).


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Rhonda Clark 08/31/06
I love your take on this old hymn.
terri tiffany08/31/06
What I like - believable dialogue, I could see a realistic character, you have a good conclusion as she struggles through her pain. Good title too. Very Well paced - didn't drag down.
What I might change - nothing really. The verses minsitered to me and were well placed. At first I thought there were too many and the got in the way of reading - then I made myself read each one and realized how perfect they were.
Joanne Sher 09/02/06
I LOVE how you structured this story! The lyrics go PERFECTLY with the story's action. This is quite good!!
Val Clark09/06/06
Strong sense of your character's challenge coming through the inner dialogue. Well done. Yeggy. (PS 'The bills were piling up as it was since' needs to be 'the bills were piling up as they had since'):-)
Rebecca Livermore09/06/06
I love the way that Scripture was used to bring hope and encouragement. It should be that way always, for all of us. This story is an excellent reminder of that. Thanks!
Amy Michelle Wiley 09/06/06
Beautiful story. There were a few minor grammer troubles, but otherwise very nicely done.
Ann FitzHenry09/06/06
I think this speaks to all of us that have had a song in our head at one time or another. I liked how you wove the song through the piece. Nice story!