The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked this entry. I personally needed to hear this message today.

Thanks for sharing.
What I like - you were direct and to the point. Your sentences were clear. You stayed focused and it flowed.
What I might change - I guess add more to your content perhaps? The ending could be abit stronger - also maybe bump the creativity up and don't use the topic word as you did.
You are a good writer in this piece you did get your message across very well.
I really liked your point, and how well you expressed it. I found the repetition of the same words very close to each other (clouds and sky in the first paragraph, for instance), to take away from it a bit, but that just may be me! Thanks so much!