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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Melody (08/24/06)

TITLE: Jaded
By Rhonda Clark


I hate my name! I hate the question it makes people ask! I hate my life! Being honest, I have to admit that I hate almost everything! Since you donít know me, you have no idea why my view of the world is so negative. Let me fill you in.

My name is Melody Grace. Everyone I meet thinks my name is so beautiful. They laughingly say itís Ďmelodic as it rolls off your tongue.í Ha, ha, so funnyónot. As bad as that raises my hackles, the question I get is worse: "Since your name is Melody, does that mean you can sing?" I want to scream every time I hear it. Everyone thinks itís a joke, and they usually have a smirk on their face when they ask that stupid question. All I can do is smile and be polite, no matter what Iím feeling insideómom said so. She says people donít intend to make me angry when they ask that, theyíre just kidding around. I know sheís right, and I guess maybe the question wouldnít be so bad if I could sing. You see, I canít carry a tune in a bucketóIím tone deaf. All the notes sound the same. Iíd love to make a beautiful sound with my voice and move people to tears with my lilting. I move them to tears all rightóbut its tears of anguish and agony.

My father always told me that I was named Melody Grace because of the sweet music Godís grace brings us. I believed this until I was seven. Thatís when he left my mother and me. About that time I started hating that stupid question about my name, as well as my life. I just wish I knew how to put some sweet Ďmelodyí in my life. My best friend, Karen, told me Jesus can make my life beautiful like music and invited me to her church youth group. Iím not sure what Jesus can do for me, but I guess Iíll find out Sunday.

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Lynda Schultz 08/31/06
I hope she did find out - they say we live up to our names and she has a big name to fill! You described the emotions, the frustration well.
Ed VanDeMark08/31/06
I don't know if this is a creative piece or a cry for help. You write well. God has given you this gift and if there is nothing else to delight in delight in this. I went to church for the wrong reason but even though I was there for the wrong reason I discovered Jesus. It didn't happen immediately but it did happen and even though it didn't improve my ability to sing or change my circumstances He did remove the angst from my heart. Give him a chance to do this for you and please keep writing.
Ruth Renwick09/04/06
Is this a true-to-life piece, or just cleverly written to sound like the genuine feelings of someone in pain? If it is true, I pray you find that your heavenly Father does indeed bring grace and harmony to your life - He most certainly will if you allow yourself to be open to His love. You will certainly find that, unlike your earthly father, He will never leave or forsake you.
Genstacia Bull09/04/06
It made me smile.
Donna Powers 09/04/06
this sounds like so many teenagers that don't have hope. You described their despair quite well. I hope that "Melody" finds a new song to sing, when she discovers the truth of God's redeeming love
Allison Egley 09/05/06
You should expand on this a bit. What does she find at youth group? Does she find what she's looking for, or perhaps something even better? I liked this a lot.
Jan Ackerson 09/05/06
This is skillfully done--like a journal entry, almost, and I love that you left us with an open ending, and a smidgen of hope. Nice!