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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Melody (08/24/06)

TITLE: Keeper Of The Key
By Brenda Craig
08/27/06


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Sheer panic grips her. Wiles have been perpetrated. Subtle breezes lift strands of her hair. They wrap around her neck, as if attempting to choke out any sound, any melody. Her lips part only to find silence. Velvet eyes set within a pale, soft face, like deep pools were known to flash green and blue sparks of internal praise. Now listless and quiet, they reflect only the loss of joy. Little foxes, they came and stole her song.

How could one of such great beauty and prose stand on the very edge of morning and not know? Not remember? Yes, the little foxes, they came and stole her song.

This is a travesty, for she is His righteous keeper of the key.

Footsteps somber with weights of encumbrance halt her once agile stride. One more step and quicksand will swallow her, consume her. Somewhere beneath fear, awareness is awakening. The light inside flickers, responding to the external breezes born of His presence, waiting, hoping to stir sonnets once sung. Droplets of moisture form, flowing aloft creamy foundations of her countenance, imploring, entreating her, yet she does not hear.

This is a perplexity, for she is His righteous keeper of the key.

Fear, the bearer of her panic, assaults her, threatens her and numbers her flaws, her past failed attempts. Deception releases fogs of treachery, obscuring triumphs, belittling offerings to her King
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Her enemy whispers in her ear, “Like a discarded harp, you are broken; you have lost your key, lost your way.”

Words of men echo through her mind, setting up walls and doors barred with self-doubt. Yet, the light flickers in her heart—in a room darkened— refusing to yield to her momentary lapse of memory and self-blame.

This is a mockery, for she is His righteous keeper of the key.

Grace and a covering of love stir, moving melodiously across the broken strings of her passion. He enfolds her with healing grace, mending, restoring—communing. O, how He loves her.

Droplets of wooing melody caress her, draw her, stir her, escalating above the silence and deafening introspections of discord. Misting red with sacrifice, He reminds her, leading with unconditional love. Rising, liquid gems of cleansing weep through velvet portals of freedom. Traveling with transforming power, tender assurances soften her. Ears once deafened—hear. Eyes once empty—shine. Voice once silent— responds to ascending vibrations of praise, releasing sighs of promise.

This is a mystery, for she is His righteous keeper of the key.

With essences of His love captivating her heart, she moves. Soft winds fanning begin to illumine, blowing on her smoldering embers, embracing her darkness. She remembers; God has not given us (me) a spirit of fear, but of power, love, and a sound mind.

Taking her thoughts captive, she walks upon the quicksand of onslaught. Her light flickering becomes a flame, exploding, and flashing with sparks of internal jubilations. Peace, like a glorious sun, radiates. It abides, pushing out fear. O, how she loves Him.

She ponders. She meditates on His word stored up in her heart for such a day as this.

O Rejoice in the LORD, O you righteous, For praise from the upright is beautiful. Praise the Lord with the harp; Make melody to Him with an instrument of ten strings. Sing Him a new song. Play skillfully with a shout of joy.


Panic born of fear finds no place in this habitation of reciprocating love, for she is moving in harmony with Him. Ahhh—She is His worshipper. He is her song.

With travesty undone, she proclaims, “I am His righteous keeper of the key.”

Sheer joy grips her. Subtle breezes of sweet refrain lift her heart, wrapping His chords around her, enveloping her within His melody. Her eyes now pearls of promise moistened by tears of repentance, radiate a new found joy. Standing in the midst of morning, she submits to the administrations of His singing, wafting across strings of her desiring—ascending.

No longer a mystery, she reclaims her place as keeper of the key; she is the upright, the beautiful, the caretaker of His melody. For praise is entrusted to the righteous.

He whispers. She sings—His song.

Ahhh, sweet mystery, sweet melody…The Lord thy God in the midst of thee is mighty, He will save, He will rejoice over thee with joy; He will rest in His Love, He will joy over thee with singing.



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2Tim 1:7 (MKJV)
Ps 33:1-3 (NKJV)
Zep 3:17 (KJV)


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Jan Ross08/31/06
An incredibly tender love story wrapped around the theme!

Her eyes now pearls of promise moistened by tears of repentance, radiate a new found joy.

This seems to be the most beautiful transition of all! I love the pearls of promise coupled with the repentance! Incredible imagery!

This is an amazing piece of writing! Amazing!!!!!
Rita Garcia08/31/06
"Ahhh, sweet mystery, sweet melody…The Lord thy God in the midst of thee is mighty, He will save, He will rejoice over thee with joy; He will rest in His Love, He will joy over thee with singing." I love these words! I love this powerful story woven with the touch of the Master's hand!



Sue Dent08/31/06
This is very, dare I say, Tolkienish? To describe a rose as just a rose would be soooo easy to do. But to make us feel it, smell it, breath it Ahhhhhh! I could feel the anguish and rejoiced in the sweet release!! Magnificent!
Lynda Schultz 08/31/06
Wow!
Trina Courtenay08/31/06
Simply beautiful! Your words, so deep. Very creative. I've added this to my favorites as I love your way with words and the message woven within.
Ann FitzHenry08/31/06
Such masterful writing! So much meaning on so many levels. I'm still thinking about what it means to me. Pack your bags! I think you're moving out of intermediates! :-)
dub W09/01/06
Outstanding creativity, well presented. My choice at this level.
Tracey Jackson09/03/06
WOW! This piece is so intense that I had to read it very slowly to try and absorb the many things that you were trying to put across. The lines in italics almost provide the voice of an additional narrator overseeing it all - you may not have intended this but I felt it gave it a special heavenly and ethereal quality.
Rebecca Livermore09/05/06
I especially love this paragraph: "Fear, the bearer of her panic, assaults her, threatens her and numbers her flaws, her past failed attempts. Deception releases fogs of treachery, obscuring triumphs, belittling offerings to her King."

How often the enemy throws our past into our faces, making us feel unfit for use in God's kingdom. Thanks for the creative way you reminded us that we all, in spite of our past, are vessels that can be used for God's glory. Beautiful!
Shari Armstrong 09/05/06
The poetry of this is simply beautiful!!
Joanne Malley09/05/06
This is outstanding! You manage to find and deliver much depth from the words you've chosen with precision. Almost poetic in language. I hope this claims noteworthy praise. Blessings. :)
Ann Grover09/05/06
Beautiful, rich, mystic, lyrical... a melody in itself... excellent writing...
Debbie Sickler09/05/06
Very poetic with the repetition of phrase and great use of alliteration. It was just enough to add to the flow without becoming noticeable and silly. Nicely done. :)
Teri Wilson09/05/06
This was simply captivating. I especially loved the lines, “little foxes, they came and stole her song.” Wonderful imagery. I also really liked your wrap-around: how it went from sheer panic grips her to sheer joy grips her. Wonderful writing!
Joanne Sher 09/05/06
This is amazing - I predict a move up for you this time, girl!! Just beautiful and tactile and gorgeous. This is absolutely poetic.
Val Clark09/08/06
This is a really storng piece of writing that can be read and interpreted on many levels. I really appreciated: 'Her lips part only to find silence.' It is impossible to praise when we have no joy! Darn those little foxes. :-) yeggy


   
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