The Official Writing Challenge
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09/03/06
Wow - very deep! Learned much from this piece!
09/03/06
this really made me think. You have a unique voice, and I am glad you shared this
09/04/06
I don't know if this is a personal reflection and life lesson or creativity. In either case you have captured the extreems of life. Most people never venture this far from the mundane. Well written it takes us from the pits to the pinical.
09/05/06
What I like- you used some powerful words and descriptions and I liked your conclusion.
What I might change - some punctuation needs to break up some of the longer sentences. I found I had to read a few sentences twice to really grasp what you were saying and that might impede some people from reading and undersanding what you want to convey.