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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Shrewdness (03/07/05)

TITLE: Wily Wolf Meets Sagacious Sheep
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03/13/05


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Down on the farm lived sweet, little Sagacious Sheep. Every day she spent her time going from clover to clover, cool water source to cool water source, eating and drinking and getting plumper and more satisfied by the minute. She paid no attention to anyone else and kept only half an eye on the dark woods surrounding her sheep pen.

In the dark woods surrounding the sheep pen lived smart, shrewd Wily Wolf. Everyday he spent his time going from one end of the woods to the other looking for a way to enter the sheep pen where the plump Sagacious Sheep was feeding.

Wily Wolf knew that The Shepherd was the only one who could manage to open the sheep pen. He was able to gain entrance into it just by calling ever so gently. Sagacious Sheep heard his voice and gently nudged open the gate for The Shepherd to come in. Wily Wolf had tried to mimic The Shepherd’s voice dozens of times, but Sagacious Sheep knew the Shepherd. Wily could not fool her.

One day Wily had a new idea. If he made the woods seem like a place Sagacious Sheep might want to explore, then, maybe, she would leave the sheep pen and come just far enough into the woods for him to trap her. Finally, he would have a tasty sheep for supper.

From the shadow of the woods, Sagacious Sheep heard the sound of a gentle bleating that sounded as if it were saying, “Cooler water, fragrant clover, come and see, come and see.” Even though Sagacious Sheep was astute enough to know that this could be a trap set for her by Wily Wolf, she had become bored with the water and clover The Shepherd had provided for her in the sheep pen. She thought maybe, just once, she would go and see if something better tasting was just on the edge of the woods. If she found something that was better tasting, she would grab a quick nibble and then run back to the pen, and, if not, then she would run back immediately to the pen with no harm done.

Sensing danger, The Shepherd walked over to the sheep pen just as Sagacious Sheep was approaching the edge of the woods, and Wily was getting ready to pounce. He took the crook of His staff, and, gently, but firmly, put it around Sagacious Sheep’s round neck. He directed her back to the sheep pen where He made sure that she had the coolest water and the most fragrant clover she had ever tasted.


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Kristy Cox03/14/05
For a minute there, I thought I was reading Aesop! What a great story. It was short and sweet, and your climax was followed closely by your denouement. Good use of alliteration! I found another word for Shrewdness: Perspicacity. Awesome, huh? Keep up the writing!
In His Grip,
KC
Sally Hanan03/15/05
Cute story. The last line doesn't seem to quite fit with the rest of it though.
Debbie OConnor03/15/05
This was really good up until the ending. I think it could have used a little more drama, showing the Shepherd saving her in the nick of time more effectively. Or maybe with the sheep suffering a little because of straying.

Still a great job. I really liked it.
Leticia Caroccio03/16/05
I really enjoyed your article. It had some drama and some very sweet moments. It is always great to know just how much our Great Shepherd loves us, protects us and gives us good things. The end was a nice surprise. Good job.
Suzanne R03/20/05
I can see this being used as a lovely children's story.
donna robinson03/20/05
I think determining the audience determines the end. Here it read like a gentle children's moral lesson, one a parent could sit and talk about later with the child. If you added more drama, you would have to change the audience. I liked thinking about reading this to a young person
darlene hight04/12/05
Beautiful allegory!~ Tame ending but I agree it depends on the intended audience.