The Official Writing Challenge
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The concepts of surrendering and relinquishing are very compelling here.

This could be expanded easily, or fictionalized as a very good short story. Some spaces between paragraphs would help, too. I liked this, and wanted to know more about your narrator's dilemma.
Yes, more details on the specifics of the problem would have helped, but this is very well done in any case.