The Official Writing Challenge
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08/25/06
The concepts of surrendering and relinquishing are very compelling here.

This could be expanded easily, or fictionalized as a very good short story. Some spaces between paragraphs would help, too. I liked this, and wanted to know more about your narrator's dilemma.
08/29/06
Yes, more details on the specifics of the problem would have helped, but this is very well done in any case.