The Official Writing Challenge
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03/16/05
I loved the story and the way the character's situation went from bad to worse. I was left feeling disappointed with the ending. I was looking for a climatic, lesson learning ending--it felt cut off.
Interesting in the beginning then it slowed down towards the end. The end seemed a little rushed. But I enjoyed it anyway.
You just had to admire this character! I think the last six paragraphs could have been reworked, maybe you didn't even need any more examples, the horse story alone was great!