The Official Writing Challenge
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08/20/06
Great analogy! I liked your conversational tone - though at some points it seemed a touch too casual, if you know what I mean. You also may want to watch run-on sentences. I enjoyed this "trip!" Thanks for writing!
08/23/06
I also enjoyed your conversational tone, although I thought the "dude" part did not fit the piece. I really liked your closing paragraph. It left me smiling:) Keep writing.