The Official Writing Challenge
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Short and to the point - and a great point at that! Maybe flesh this out, with a few real-life experiences thrown in for a bit more impact. Thanks for sharing!
I have to say also that your writing is good, but would be better if you said more or used some examples too!
This is very nice. I like how you called the valley just another part of God's creation. You asked for a critique, so here goes: This needs to be longer. Maybe you could expound upon some of the points you make. Also, I think the first sentence of the 2nd paragraph needs a question mark at the end. You writing shows great promise. Keep up the great work - next time just give us more.