The Official Writing Challenge
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08/11/06
If father had been Father, I'd have had a clue that it was Biblical. You captured my attention quickly & surprised with Jonah. Enjoyed this quick reminder about obedience.
08/11/06
Oooh, good job! This one's awesome!
08/11/06
Great descriptions and thought provoking. Nicely done!
08/12/06
Powerful story in a limited number of words. Your descriptions are excellent.

One small typo (breathe instead of breath).

Nice work with the twist at the end. Wonderfully done.
08/15/06
You got me on ths one. Couldn't figure out where it was going until it was almost over. Super job with Jonah. Only one sentence I had a lil trouble with, but the rest was awesome. Excellent job!! God bless.
08/16/06
This packs a powerful punch! I definitely did NOT catch on until you hit me with the "Jonah brick" at the end. Excellent lesson in obedience. I enjoyed this!
08/16/06
As some of the teenagers I know would say, "Dude! You rock!"

Great piece of writing. Loved the detailed descriptions of his surroundings. Totally thought he was somewhere else.

Summer
08/16/06
Very good writing. Loved the detail. Great job.