The Official Writing Challenge
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08/11/06
I'm not a poetry expert, however, I enjoyed your imagery and the wonderful ties you made to the vision theme. For me, it really worked nicely.
"God-with-us, who would walk the very paths we take,
Who would feel our pains, aching, sharp and numb,
Who would know our griefs, the struggles that we make."

Excellent! And not only did He walk among us and die for us, but He lives with us even now.