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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Vision (08/03/06)

TITLE: Cleared Vision
By Benjamin Graber
08/05/06


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I looked across the narrow path
And saw it barred with walls of thorns;
Enveloped in a fog of doubts
It seemed so dismal and forlorn—

I heard so many fearful tales
Of broken hearts and sacrifice
And I was thankful I could see
So clearly through religious lies;

But them a voice called out to me
To dare the path with all its pain;
I recognized a Savior
Who walked the path, my heart to claim—

I stepped upon the path in faith,
And suddenly my vision cleared;
The thorns are nothing to the joy
Of walking with my Savior here…

To die to self seemed foolishness
When I once stood among the “wise”,
But love has helped me truly see
It’s selfishness that’s full of lies,

To take the cross will hurt a while,
Like seeds that fall in dirt and die;
But when love’s harvest time has come,
We’ll reap the fruit that gold can’t buy!


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Jan Ackerson 08/10/06
The thorns are nothing to the joy
Of walking with my Savior here…


Perfect.
Kaylee Blake 08/12/06
This is just wonderful. I loved the last stanza. Great job. Beautiful.
Edy T Johnson 08/16/06
My favorite lines:
"To die to self seemed foolishness
When I once stood among the “wise”,
But love has helped me truly see
It’s selfishness that’s full of lies,"

I like your poem! Keep writing and I'll read more :)
David (The Goliath Assassin)05/09/07
I'm all for dieing to self, man. This nation needs to do more of it as a whole. Thank you for voicing this.
Jacquelyn Horne05/14/07
I really liked this poem. It should minister to many.
Joanne Sher 07/06/07
Such meaning and depth here, and much to think about. A wonderful first challenge!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 05/06/10
Again I say Wow and marvel at the way God uses us to help each other. He definitely knew I needed these words today and practically shouted at me until I heard Him and read this message God bless.

editing note in 3rd verse should it be them or then?

Again Thank you for obeying God with your inspirational words. God gave them to you as a gift and you chose to share them with the world!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 06/30/11
This is outstanding. It gave me tear-filled eyes and goosebumps that God led me here right now when I needed those words.