The Official Writing Challenge
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03/14/05
Great story and writing. Loved the descriptives. Deceptions begets deception!
Very nicely written. Story flowed from beginning to end and kept me engrossed. It was quite frightening, actually.

I like the way you described marriage like sandbags. To describe marriage like sandbags can be a good thing, as well. A strong marriage, like sandbags, can protect you from painful experience life can throw at you. You don't have to go it alone. Good submission.
A great entry. Your story was vividly told and the topic nailed. Terrific.
03/14/05
Excellent writing and story-telling. I don't know if "enjoyed it" would be the right words-LOL- but it definitely held my interest.
Well done!
Blessings, Lynda
03/14/05
Gracious! What a story! It sure kept my attention.
03/15/05
Well done. This exposed the selfishness of wanting everyone and everything to please one person alone, and the consequences of living that way.
I think the title said it all.
03/17/05
You craftily exposed the selfishness of the husband and how he got his deserts. We reap what we sow.
03/18/05
Great story. Well written and drew me in from to start to finish.

Kathy

03/20/05
Where is the shrewdness? I can see selfishness and reaping what you sow, but I can't see shrewdness. This maybe just me. It certainly kept my attention.
03/20/05
I looked up shrewd in the dictionary. Synonyms are astute, cagey, slick: having or showing clever awareness and resourcefulness. I think this husband showed shrewdness in leading a double life and keeping his affair from his wife.