The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/06
I might have put your fourth paragraph after the first so that we know right up front what the situation is. A sensitive story well written. Congratulations.
03/14/06
Very sweet and tender. Be careful of run-on sentences! This is a story written with great love.
03/14/06
This is told very nicely.
03/14/06
This is a very loving, touching story. I like it the way it is, letting us wonder for just a minute if the little girl had died. I liked that you said she was "quite the evangelist".
03/15/06
Having gone through simular, I feel that you wrote this with grace. It's never easy, but I think you handled God's Timing with a loving,gentleness of words.

Thank you.
this was so sad! Good writing
03/19/06
Great article, very touching.