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This is something that came to me in remembrance of a dear little girl I went to school with. We were never close friends at all, but were always pleasant to each other. She though, was always made fun of by kids and was just one of those poor little souls. She had a sister that was in the “click” crowd, and I can’t say enough how this was hurtful to this little girl. Anyway, she always held a dear place in my heart, and she died very young. Here is a true story about her:
… We were in the 7th grade and I was at a school dance. I normally never got to go much to things like dances, but did get to go to this one. While there, I guess the kids decided they would use her for their entertainment. Guys began coming up asking her to dance, and I knew then something was wrong. One danced with her normal, and took her back to her corner. Then another came and danced with her. After a couple more, I began to get very agitated, knowing this was not good. The poor girl was taken. It escalated until these boys, one after another were dancing with her and each one would break in, and so on. She began waking up to it and you could see how uncomfortable she was. I watched in horror as all the kids, and I mean all of them, were roaring in laughter. You could just hear the evil. Even the teachers were all laughing and the laughing was ringing through the gym and my ears. I couldn’t take any more, as I wondered how even teachers could be this way. As she began to realize it that it wasn’t well intended, she began trying to pull away. I couldn’t be held back, and I ran out of the floor and grabbed the boys arm off of her and twirled him around. She looked at me and time stood still, but the look in her eyes were something that is branded in my mind forever. There was a thankfulness in those eyes that no one could understand unless they had walked that mile. I still see her face today. I stood in the middle of that gymnasium and somehow began to chastise them all, even the teachers. I watched as that entire gym was filled with nothing but heads down and total silence.
You actually could hear a pin drop. I gave them what I thought about it. She had looked at me and cried thank you and then ran out the door. I guess she ran all the way home, because she was gone. No one said a word to me about it, because they knew they were wrong, even the teachers. Can you believe that was never mentioned again?
School went on like normal the next week. No one said a thing, not a word. But, that night will forever be embedded in my mind, and her little “thank you” and those eyes of thankfulness will always be in my heart. This girl holds a very dear place in my heart. She died not long after, for she was found between the bunk bed and the wall. She had died through the night. I know I will see this precious tiny sister when we go to live with the Lord.
(Non-fiction)
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The longer paragraphs could be divided into shorter paragraphs. Sometimes short paragraphs with even one strong sentence is very effective.
As for the outcome, perhaps the Lord took her home early because he didn't want her to hurt any longer, and she finally found peace in His arms.
I appreciate you sharing this with us...thank you, and when you see her again in eternity, I'm sure she'll remember you.
God bless~
I have a hard time finding the topic of "day's end" here. If you're new to the challenge, you may not realize that the topic is one of the judges' criteria for rating each entry.
You're a writer of considerable potential, and I look forward to reading more of your entries as you learn the ins and outs of the weekly challenge. If future entries are as touching as this one, we'll be quite blessed.