The Official Writing Challenge
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Very well written! The sense of immediacy was tangible; I was right in that moment with you. Loved the dialogue. "I was so afraid of appearing old, that I end up doing something childish." For some reason, these words resonate within me, cause me to evaluate my own actions. I understand the feeling. Although for me it wasn't retirement, but turning 50, I fought my fear of becoming a prim and proper old lady by taking a belly dance class. Perhaps I will share the story in a future challenge. Thanks for the great read!
Very well written! The sense of immediacy was tangible; I was right in that moment with you. Loved the dialogue. "I was so afraid of appearing old, that I end up doing something childish." For some reason, these words resonate within me, cause me to evaluate my own actions. I understand the feeling. Although for me it wasn't retirement, but turning 50, I fought my fear of becoming a prim and proper old lady by taking a belly dance class. Perhaps I will share the story in a future challenge. Thanks for the great read!
09/18/09
I enjoyed reading your story. It made me laugh a little, because I think we all have those moments where we feel that we have something to prove, and sometimes we end up doing something stupid or something that we didn't really want to do just so we can prove someone else wrong.
09/22/09
Wow! As someone who just got her medicare card, your writing made me jump out of the plane and spread my wings, too. I could feel the rush of freedom and the reminder that it is all God's plan. He will never let me fall out of His sight. Very well written!Your words created a real picture, a real experience in my mind...a refreshing escape. Thank you!
09/24/09
What an excellent story! So expressive, I could feal the fear and nerves demanding to be acknowledged. Loved the comment, "Don't put that much power in me hands. Somebody else much bigger is in control". Great job. Congratulations.
09/24/09
Wow! Great story and congratulstions on your EC!
09/24/09
I truly enjoyed reading this and connecting with your MC on some level--yeah, we sometimes rebel at getting older by doing silly things. I like how you wove the scripture into this story so effortlessly. Great job--congrats on your 1st place win and EC ranking.
09/24/09
Wait a minute! This was in level 1?? Pack your bags, baby, and move on up! Great read...my fav part was the regurgitaded words on the Dude. lol
09/24/09
An interesting story, well told. Congratulations!
Just beautiful! Sorta kinda makes me want to try it :) Contgratulations on the 1st place and EC placing...well deserved!
You are a very good writer! I love that it had a great message, along with all the fun.
09/25/09
I think you must have actually done this to write so perfectly about it. I love the conversation, the characters - everything. Congratulations on 1st place and your EC placement. I hope we see a lot more from you.
09/25/09
Awesome writing. Way cool that you got a first place and an EC on your second challenge entry. I used to fly airplanes when I was much (much) younger...but I never had the hutzpah to jump out of one. Kudos.
How like taking a leap of faith and stepping into God's will - the free-fall quickly turns to flying, and you don't want it to end. Congrats on your EC! Wonderful work.
09/27/09
You've packed a whole lot of emotions, descriptions and humour into this piece. Well done, for you also avoided too much focus on the "gravity" of the situation. :-)
10/08/09
Sorry I'm a lttle late commenting on this article. Wanted to see who was writing in beginners and I know you won't be in beginners this week. Good job!!!