The Official Writing Challenge
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09/20/09
Great thoughts here. I love looking at all the school supplies, too. and there is something special about a brand new notebook and pen:) ahhhh....
09/21/09
I like the way you brought around the fact that buying school supplies was something you would miss. I also miss the time I went out to get all my children need for a new year of education.
09/21/09
Very well done. Nice descriptions and a clear voice showing sorrow and joy.
I like the way you let us feel that bitter sweet emotion of letting go of our kids and the fact tha we never cease to bo mothers, so true.Yet life is not over whe our kids leave. There's a whole new adventure waiting out there.
There is indeed something wonderful about a new notebook...journal...pencils...ahh time to go shopping!
I think you did a very good job at capturing emotions, congrats on your placing!
Thank you all for the feed-back!
09/25/09
Very nice story with vivid descriptions, and tangible emotions. Congratulations on your Highly Commended status.