The Official Writing Challenge
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I like how you put some new life into this well-known story. The last lines I thought were particuarly good, even with the typo. (I think you meant "my" instead of "by") and I really like the thought of tasting the sweetness of forgivness. That's original. Good stuff!
I really enjoyed your animated version of the garden story. A very smooth read! Your piece could be developed into a children's book. Blessings!
05/27/09
Nice outlook. I like the perspective of forgiveness. Thanks for a good read.
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