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03/14/08
Very interesting character study, written in a unique voice.

I don't understand your last paragraph. What happened to Ingomar?

Your title is very good--it really drew me in.
A good take on coming from 'death unto life'. I particularly liked the very descriptive “Ingomar dipped his toes into the occult and got his pinkies burned”.
I'm guessing in the last paragraph, Ingomar has been confused and frustrated by the traditions of the church (even lively churches) and just "let go and let God" take over. Well done.
03/17/08
Interesting title, not expecting this kind of story.
I like your descriptive phrases, although some stretch on a bit. I felt out of breath. Maybe if you broke them into shorter sentences it would help.
I'm glad the MC found the true God, even if he had to be knocked down to see it.
Good message, thank you for writing this.