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Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "Don't Cut off Your Nose to Spite Your Face" (without using the actual phrase or litera (02/14/08)
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TITLE: The Mad Cow | Previous Challenge Entry
By Shayla Cody
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And day after day, his games were the same.
Always the first one to eat at the trough
If someone came close, he’d send them right off.
Under the tree where others had laid,
He was the one who got the best shade
He kicked and he pushed until they all moved
‘Cause this was the only spot he had approved.
If one of the other cows found something cool,
He’d take it away as a general rule.
Clover or mums, even buttercups, too
He’d bite and he’d push with a very loud “moo”.
He always had to have the best to eat.
So he made all the other cows give up their treats.
One day the farmer put up a new fence
To border the barnyard, it just made good sense.
The other cows gathered to study and see,
Bully wanted the best view, “First me! First me!”
With anger and spite, Bully pushed them away,
Like he’d always done any other old day.
He stomped to the fence with sure steps so proud,
He leaned on the fence and then screamed right out loud!
He jumped way up high, and then turned tail to run
The others cows chuckled with satisfied fun.
Bully ran to the barn, a safe place he knew,
He cried, and he cried, “Oh Boo-hoo and moo!”.
An electrical fence, how could that be?
Bully’s pride took a hit as he cried out, “Poor me!”
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My only problem is with the word "cow", which is a female animal. Not sure how you can get around that one...
I definitely see some allegory here--good job!
Laury
As per Jan's comment, were you to change the name to Bossy, all of the masculine and feminine pronouns are one syllable, so the shift should be seamless.
I must admit, I did have a little difficulty with the meter.
Had trouble with the meter and would have changed a few lines, but the plot and illustration was great.
I didn't catch the gender problem the first time I read it. It's the little details that can sometimes throw you off. I know they do in my writing. :)
Thanks for sharing!
Periods and commas always come before quotations marks regardless of logic, at least in the United States.
Great job with the topic. :)