The Official Writing Challenge
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12/14/07
I really got a kick out of these people, in particular Monica the pray-er.
12/16/07
This made me feel so welcome...like you introduced me to each of your friends. Well done
12/16/07
I like this - each snapshot description really captures the joy in the church members' lives. Fun to read.
12/18/07
I like the conversation style. You don't over-explain the people, but you introduce them. It draws the reader in.

Some of the sentences are a little awkward because of the punctuation. A quick refresher on commas, colons and semi-colons will help with that.

An easy, fun read!