The Official Writing Challenge
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08/05/06
Great message! This is SO true - all we have to do when we get frustrated with our earthly bosses is remember that God put them there, and it makes it SO much easier! You did a great job of portraying Cassie's attitude and the change in it. I'd probably break up some of your paragraphs into shorter ones, but otherwise, this was very good - and convicting!!
08/05/06
Your title really drew me in. I was curious about your "stinky boss." Good writing with a message.

Thanks!
You packed a great message into so few words - very succinct writing! Well done.
I also think breaking up your paragraphs would help the piece and don't forget one usually starts a new line for a different speaker if that makes sense. Keep writing!
08/13/06
For starters, the first paragaraph needs to be broken up, with a line for each "person speaking". Then follow through each paragraph with same...But the drift of the story is very good. Keep at it. Practice makes perfect.