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07/28/06
Short, to the point, and very well done! One minor "fixable": "For all my days of walking on earth were not in vain; as THEY led me to walk hand in hand with my Lord" - to agree with "all my days". Good work.
07/28/06
Love your last sentence. I enjoyed this.
07/29/06
I liked the format you chose on this in showing the reasons for walking at different stages in life. Very effective!

Watch your use of sentence fragments: "For each step I took brought forth a great adventure.", "For each chosen step led me to a new place and person.", and "For all my days of walking on earth were not in vain; as it led me to walk hand in hand with my Lord." The sentences make the point just as well if the 'For' is eliminated, and the sentences then are complete.

Your meditation is very thought-provoking, though. I have a teenager, and the thoughts about the teen walk are so true! Good job!

08/13/06
I liked this! Short, sweet and to the point! It showed creativity - but it also showed a great desire to be independent of parents, right? This was very nicely done. Good job.