The Official Writing Challenge
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07/30/06
Very neat idea - I was beginning to wonder who this person was! This definitely has the feel of a poem, but it isn't laid out as such. I enjoyed the meter, but it was hard to follow in paragraph form. Still a joy to read!
07/31/06
A joyful walk indeed!
08/02/06
Your "friend" sounds like an incredible person...maybe I will be like her when I grow up!

I do think it might work better in stanzas, since it does have a poetic lilt to it. I think it will flow more freely and beautifully as a poem...give that a try and see what you think!
08/12/06
WHAT A WONDERFUL WAY TO PORTRAY THIS DIVINE BEING.
I LIKE THE WAY YOU DRAG THE MYSTERY BEFORE YOU FINALLY UNVEIL YOUR FRIEND.