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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Soul (07/13/06)

TITLE: Fragile Souls
By Allison Egley
07/20/06


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“You can turn now. It’s clear.”

“Nope. I can see a car.”

“Alex, that car is on a different road.”

“I don’t care. I can see it. Who knows? It could leap over the guardrail, plow through the grass and run right into me.”

“I think your odds are better in the lottery.”

“It could still happen.”

“Come on Alex. You need some adventure. It’s good for the soul.”

“Not mine. My soul is very fragile, thank you very much.”

“I’d hardly call making a left turn on a green light an adventure. Pull over. Let me drive.”

“Ok, fine. Just don’t scare me, Sophie.”

“I’ll try not to, but with your fragile soul, I can’t guarantee anything.”

“Oh, knock it off.”

*****

“Sophie, I hardly think going 80 miles per hour when the speed limit is 70 is a good idea. Don’t forget, I have…”

“I know, I know. You have a fragile soul. But you know what? I don’t think your soul is fragile.”

“Well, death is never good for a soul, and I’m staring death in the face right now! Slow down! Did I fail to mention that my car is fragile as well?”

“Actually, death can be good for a soul.”

“What do you mean by that?”

“Let’s talk about this over dinner. I’m hungry. There’s a Denny’s at the next exit. I’ll pull off there.”

*****

“What were you talking about, saying that death can be good for our souls?”

“Remember what Pastor Todd said at youth group? He talked about how Jesus died for our sins.”

”Yeah, but what does that have to do with my death? I mean, I know Jesus died and came back to life, but I’m not going to come back to life when I die, so how can death be good for my soul?”

“Alex, when we die, our souls don’t die. They live forever, either in eternal separation from God or in heaven with God. Alex if something did happen tonight on our way to Lydia’s and God asked you why He should let you into heaven, what would you say?”

“You know me, Sophie. I’m a good person. I’ve never done anything really bad. I gave money when our high school was collecting for hurricane relief.”

“Being good isn’t good enough. You’ve lied, right?”

“Of course I’ve lied. I could never tell my parents the truth about where I go after school most days.”

“Well, then you can’t get into heaven on your own.”

“What? Just because I’ve lied?”

“Yes. You see, Alex, God is holy, and he can’t let anything unholy into heaven. He says that all of our good deeds, like you giving money to hurricane relief, are like filthy rags. [1] He also says that there is none righteous.” [2]

“So being good won’t cut it, huh? You said I can’t get to heaven on my own. Does that mean that there is another way?”

“The Bible says ‘that if you confess with you mouth "Jesus is Lord" and believe in your heart that God raised Him from the dead, you will be saved.' [3] Alex, are you ready to take the next step?”

“I think I am, Sophie. When Pastor Todd was talking last night, I wanted to talk to someone, but I didn’t think I could do it in a big group like that. What do I need to do?”

“Well, first you need to admit that you’re a sinner.”

“Let’s see… I’ve lied, I’ve disobeyed my parents, I’ve cussed, I’ve said things I shouldn’t have…. I’d say that puts me fully in the sinner category.”

“Don’t worry. I’m there too. Next you have to believe that Jesus is God’s Son and that He died for your sins and rose again.”

“I believe that. I’ve seen Jesus work in my life already. I just didn’t know it was Him.”

“Then you have to confess that you need Jesus as Lord of your life.”

“I know I do. So what do I do next?”

“Just talk to Jesus. Tell Him what you just told me.”

“Ok. I think I can do that…. Dear Jesus....”

“Amen. Alex, do you know what this means?”

“It means I don’t have to worry about my fragile soul anymore, right?”

“Right. Let’s go. Lydia will be waiting for us.”

“Ok. You can drive. Just drive carefully. My car is still rather fragile. And my bones, and my skin, and my heart, and….”

“Oh, knock it off.”


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Author’s Notes:
[1] Is. 64:6 NIV
[2] Romans 3:10 NIV
[3] Romans 10:9 NIV
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Marilee Alvey07/22/06
This is a very important topic: witnessing. Interesting pairing it up with young people driving. Keep writing.
Rita Garcia07/25/06
I really enjoyed the dialogue in this story. We never know when our words will fall on an open heart.
Great writting!
Brenda Craig07/25/06
A light hearted story with a deep hearted conversation. Kept it real, simple and applicable to every day life. An delightful read. I enjoyed this.
Venice Kichura07/25/06
I agree---great job on the dialogue & writing.
Carla Feagans07/25/06
I agree, excellent job with the dialogue, this was a very true to life conversation in how it flowed, and a wonderful portrayal of witnessing as well. Good writing.
Trina Courtenay07/25/06
Always a pleasure reading your articles! Keep up the great work.
Joanne Sher 07/25/06
Got a REAL kick out of your second to last line. You did an excellent job of keeping your two people "in character" through this - It's rare I can read through as much dialogue as is here and not have to go back and see who is saying what. Great read!
Lisa Vest07/25/06
Great job! Sophie just needs to repent for speeding and being a bad example in front of her unsaved friend..LOL :) but hey if that's what it took to get him to think about his soul then maybe it's okay????? You did a good job with the dialogue-Good flow. Keep on writing!
Kimberly Mitchell07/25/06
Kept my interest. Good work.
Linda Watson Owen07/26/06
Oh, this IS a delightful read! Sure enjoyed this light-hearted approach to what is more often a very serious topic. So cute!!
Debbie Sickler07/27/06
Normally, I'd say that you needed to include something more than just dialog, but I think you made it work. I especially liked the beginning section in the car. :)