The Official Writing Challenge
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07/21/06
I like how in the end the daughter ended up giving life to her parents. I would expand on that a little more though, rather than just saying she was instrumental in bringing them to the Lord. Explain how that happened. I'm glad there was a happy ending.
07/22/06
Yes, I, too, would make more of a connection into the blessing of that birth because God used her to bless her parents. Don't get so involved in the story, however meaningful and beautiful, that you miss a great takeaway! That having been said, I really enjoyed the story. You built up the drama well and I breathed a sigh of relief for you when it was all over!
07/25/06
Compelling story - I was holding my breath to see what would happen. SMall point - I think at times your dialogue sounds a little unnatural eg 'Yes, and it is one of the best occurrences of our life too. ' Otherwise, good story (I guess the ending was curtailed a bit by that pesky word limit!)