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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Soul (07/13/06)

TITLE: Saving Lous
By Trina Courtenay


I’ve been taking care of Lous for a little over thirty-three years. For the first 26 years I did a pathetic job at best as Lous was dry, thirsty and in desperate need of tender loving when I met her Creator back in August of ’99. He ever so patiently showed me how to feed and take care of her. I’ve been extremely greatful ever since.

Until then I fed her what ever I so desired. I would allow her to read novels and watch movies on incest, murder, lust, you name any book or movie which didn’t glorify God and I let her get her fill.

That unforgettable summer I made her throw out those bad influences. She pleaded to at least give them to someone else who might enjoy them. My response to this was to say, ‘If you give these away then you’ll only be adding to the lies and deceit I’ve allowed you to live for over a quarter of a century.’ I stood firm in my belief they’d added to her thirsty and dried out appearance and made her pour an entire decanter of coffee along with the grounds into the black garbage bag which held her precious belongings.

She cried about how much they had cost her. I told her they were costing more then she knew.

She cried it had taken many years to accumulate her collection. I told her God was good and would replace each and everyone with ones which were wholesome, strong in character, and/or would glorify Him.

And He did.

Besides allowing Lous to read and watch whatever her hearts desire I also let Lous do whatever she wanted whenever she wanted. I set no boundaries or guidelines. Whether right or wrong I allowed her to experiment. After all we only have one life to live why shouldn’t we have fun. Never did I think about the long term effects of such actions.

Many hours spent with her Creator made me realized how wrong I’d been and I explained to Lous how she could no longer date, drink, party her face off and basically do nothing with her life. I knew it was a drastic measure but I had to do what I now knew to be in her best interest.

It was hard at first and Lous lost many a so called friend.

But God is good and He let her see who was friend and who was foe.

I then convinced Lous to take some time to get to know herself in order to decide what she wanted out of this one chance at life, and what she didn’t.

To my delight Lous started to blossom into a beautiful young lady. She took my advice, stopped dating and got an education to boot. You should have seen her up on center stage, dressed in cap and gown as she received her diploma. My pride radiated throughout the entire stadium.

On a separate occasion the night before we were to attend family bible camp she whispered to me how she was going to meet her life partner there. I told her not to get too excited as there was only one available bachelor and he drove a bright yellow station wagon. If Lous was to even consider dating this man she’d have to go through a lesson in humility.

She did.

Two years later in front of God, family and friends they became life partners.

It’s been a real blessing to have witnessed first hand the transformation Lous has made. She is no longer shriveled up nor dried out. She now shines brilliantly. Lous lives a life we’re both proud of although she knows there are still lessons to learn daily.

I don’t really know where Lous would be today had I not met Our Creator. Meeting Him and the changes I’ve made saved Lous. Our chances of eternal life would’ve been slim or next to none if I hadn’t.

I remember my mother telling me, ‘eyes are the windows to your soul.’ Every time I look in the mirror I am pleased to see how far Lous and I have come. Without my soul I’d be an empty vessel waiting to die instead I'm full of life and willing to live.


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Joanne Sher 07/24/06
Compelling story - if it is true, it must be SO cathartic to share here! What a lesson to learn!
T. F. Chezum07/24/06
I agree, this is a compelling story. Good job.
Venice Kichura07/24/06
Written well & a wonderful reminder that the eyes are the window to the soul.
Jan Ross07/24/06
I love it -- looking at "Lous" in the mirror ... "Soul"! What a change our Creator has made to our souls! Very good! :)
Lisa Vest07/24/06
This is a very creative angle to do for 'soul'. I liked it alot. The only thing I saw was a missing word in your second sentence 'tender loving ---care---, I'm guessing is what you wanted to say, but you've probably caught that by now. This really demonstrates that verse in Proverbs..guard your heart for out of it flow the issues of life...to paraphrase. Great job!
Brenda Craig07/24/06
I wondered if this was where you were going. Lovely story of growth and maturity in Him. Well written!
Shari Armstrong 07/24/06
Good job :)
Jen Davis07/24/06
An interesting and creative approach to the topic. "Without my soul I'd be an empty vessel..." Well done.
Jan Ackerson 07/24/06
This is a fun approach to the topic! There's a run-on sentence in the first paragraph, and a few other grammar glitches, but I really enjoyed the gradual realization of who/what "Lous" is (very REVELC...) I liked this.
Dr. Sharon Schuetz07/24/06
Good job. I liked the way you talked about your soul as a separate individual. Really great approach.
Helen Paynter07/25/06
'She cried about how much they had cost her. I told her they were costing more then she knew.'
Very profound. Great story.
william price07/25/06
A very nice, honestly written entry. Your sencerity comes through in your writing. I can tell you really believe and walk what you write.
God Bless!
Rita Garcia07/25/06
Creative and well written. I wasn't sure where you were headed in the opening lines, I like the turn and the ending.
Ann FitzHenry07/25/06
I really enjoyed your entry. I loved trying to figure out who Lous was! (Lous is soul spelled backwards! Very clever use of the mirror.)

I can tell a lot of thought went into your entry.

Great job!
Debbie Sickler07/25/06
I have to admit that I must not be as clever as the others who have commented. I was lost at the beginning, trying to figure out who or what Lous was. Now that I've read their comments, I went back and read the ending about looking in the mirror and went, "duh!" Great approach and so clever. Never would have caught the title=soul backwards. :)
Teri Wilson07/25/06
I have to admit that, like the previous commenter, I didn't "get it" at first. I went back and re-read it and found it to be very nice. I really like the soul-lous reversal. Good job.
Stephen Paynter07/26/06
I loved your entry - you set a lovely tone with this slightly whimspical handling of soul - it was so sincere and passionate as well, in a way - passionate for holy living. There are some real gems of insight into soul-care here. Superb! Bravo!
Tracey Jackson07/26/06
What a clever entry! On first reading, it seemed like a parent with a very lost teenager trying desperately to get them back on track until I read it again. And get back on trip you did! Thanks for sharing.