The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow. I love the sentence about the uslessness of wiping away tears only to be replaced by new ones. A heartrending story. Makes the reader feel for Betsy. Personally, I hoped for a happier ending though.
I read this story with great sadness. It is amazing how God is with us even through the most difficult situations. I'm sorry for the loss of Jonathon. But for his friend it will be hard to pick up the pieces. Wonderful job! Loved It!!!
It is a both sad and beautiful story. You captured emotions so well.
A story that is truly heart stirring.
My, My. Your story sure stirred up some emotions in me. Granted the story could use a little work here and there tightening it up and some mechanical stuff, but you told an honest story. It was very fresh. Keep working. I'll be looking to find out who the writer is. God job. God Bless!!
Great entry, but sad story. Two things bother me; one, what does "shotgun" mean? (the house?) And the other, Betsy was so anguished she WALKED home and left her car at the hosp? Anyway, nicely done.