The Official Writing Challenge
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This piece is a good reminder of how God's creation can refresh us. Remember to proof your work carefully. You have a few grammatical changes that should be made. Sometimes it works well to reduce the size of run-on sentences, making each thought more concise. I loved your last sentence-great closing!
07/23/06
Forgetting all the mechanics here for a minute. They will come as you hone your craft, but you have the hard part already. I found your entry to be an honest very visual snippet of life. That special, brief, unplanned moment where God shows us something. And you communicated that well with the imagery of yor words. You ministered your point. Well done. You are on your way. God Bless you!!
07/26/06
Short, brief and to the point! Very well done with the exception of a couple of minor words missing; and I'd like to suggest you space out your one large paragraph into some smaller ones to make it much easier to read. I loved the nature walk and the thoughts you arrived at on that walk. Nicely done.