The Official Writing Challenge
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07/22/06
I really liked this. It grabbed my attention, and there was a good, descriptive flow thoughout.
Great discriptions, held my interest the whole way through.
07/26/06
wow! i think this is a bomb. covert it to a rap video and it will win a grammy. bank on that!
07/26/06
The first part was understandable - a man in the throes of lust; and the last paragraph was priceless - but in between...I got bogged down with "The 'I do", did that mean he married her? Then the bottle got him? Anyway, it did lure this Reader in, kept her interested, then...although a bit confused - finished the last paragraph with a lump in the throat. Great job on the parts I understood; intriguing, with a great lure for the reader looking for something ah...let's say "different or unique".