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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Great (07/06/06)

TITLE: Thomas the Great
By Tabiatha Tallent
07/10/06


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Thomas the Great

“Are you guys ready to go?” My eyes rolled at my mom’s words and at the thought of taking my little brother to the park. There was no way of getting out of that chore though, so I set about looking for my shoes.

The door bell interrupted my thoughts, so I answered the door instead of looking for shoes. “Hi.”

“Hello, package for Thomas the Great.”

“Yeah, that would be my brother. I’ll sign for it.”

“Thank you ma’am, have a nice day.” The UPS man walked away and I closed the door with my hip as I shook the box.

Thomas the Great, how ridiculous. “Thomas, you’ve got a package from UPS!” I heard his boots clomping hurriedly down the steps.

“A package? Cool. What is it?”

“I have no idea. Why don’t you open it up and see.”

By then, mom had joined us, and after several minutes of tearing, Thomas pulled out a homemade Superman cape.

“Awesome. It has my name on it.” He passed it to mom for her approval and she read the words on the back for him.

“Thomas the Great. Let’s try it on you and see how it looks.” Mom tied the cape around his neck and he went zooming through the foyer into the living room. He ran back into the foyer and climbed the stairs and stood on the top step with his hands on his hips and his chest stuck out. Then, he was gone again running through the house.

I looked around for my shoes, but didn’t see them. Frustrated, I called to Thomas, “Come on! As soon as I find my shoes, we’re leaving.”

In no time, I heard his boots on the steps again. “Look Janie, I found your shoes. See, I am Thomas the Great.

“Whatever. Let’s just get going.” I slipped my shoes on and headed out the door.

Mom had her head stuck out the door as she yelled, “You guys be careful and don’t forget that you’ve got visitation with the youth group tonight, so don’t be late.”

Great, I have to take the blue-caped wonder to the park, and then I’ll have to watch out for him during visitation tonight. Who’s gonna listen to a bunch of kids anyway?

The park was filled with kids. I was the only teenager around, so I took a place by myself on a bench near the swings. Soon, the rhythm of the swings had sung me to sleep. A shrill cry from a little girl interrupted my nap, and I jumped from my place on the bench and looked for the blue cape.

Finally, I saw him. He was standing in his Superman stance with his hands on his hips and his chest stuck out, with about ten kids sitting around with their eyes fixed on him. I couldn’t imagine what he was saying that had them so captivated.

Slipping closer to the crowd, I took a seat on a swing close by so that I could hear what was going on.

“And he took the rock out of his pocket and put it in his sling, and he twirled it around and around his head.” All the kids sat silently, with their eyes glued to Thomas as he talked and slung his imaginary slingshot. “Then, he let that rock fly! It hit that giant square in the head, and he fell down dead.”

“Wow!” “Cool.” The kids seemed amazed at Thomas’ story.

“My teacher read it right out of the Bible so I know its true. God loved David and helped him kill the giant. He loves us, and He’ll help us when we need help, too.” I couldn’t believe that my brother was holding their attention with a Bible story, and was sharing about God too.

As the kids sat up on their knees and asked Thomas to tell more stories, I felt a sense of pride that he was my brother. I also felt ashamed that he was being a better witness for God than I was.

I never forgot that day at the park. God reminded me of how awesome He is, and that He can even use a child to spread His word. Thomas doesn’t wear his cape anymore, but he will always be Thomas the Great to me.


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A. E. Cuthbert07/13/06
This is so sweet. I love the way you told the story.
Carol Shaffron07/14/06
WOW, double WOW! This brings tears to my eyes at how our MIGHTY God will use the innocence of a "little child". Doesn't the word say somewhere, "And a little child shall lead them."? Of for that innocence and fearlessness once again . . .
Tracey Jackson07/17/06
A great portrayal of a relationship with a sibling that moves from something of irritation to love and admiration. The piece is also a great reminder of how God often uses the "weaker" ones for his great purposes. I really enjoyed this. Thank you and well written!
Lynda Schultz 07/17/06
Well done. You captured my attention right from the start.
Joanne Sher 07/17/06
Great story! Well told, and you definitely get and keep the reader's attention!
Phyllis Inniss 07/18/06
I join with the above reviewers in saying how much I enjoyed reading your entry. I like how you captured the sibling relationship, moving from an unpleasant chore to a situation of great admiration. God works in mysterious ways.
Pat Guy 07/18/06
This is wonderful! Well written, captivating all the way through. You captured the progression of emotions and scene very well. A joy to read.
Rita Garcia07/18/06
Heartwarming and told so very well! A great joy to read!
Sandra Petersen 07/18/06
This was wonderfully told! Even an older person who has had a younger sibling can relate to the dreaded 'take your younger sib to' command from a parent.

Good message, right on topic!
Jan Ackerson 07/18/06
Wonderful, and I especially commend you for your deft touch with dialog.
Kimberly Mitchell07/18/06
Oh, how touching. This is one of the best in this whole level I'm sure of it.
Valerie Routhieaux07/20/06
Thank you for sharing this wonderful story. I could see everything you conveyed. Well done. Keep writing


   
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