The Official Writing Challenge
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Well-constructed story with a great :-) message. I like the insertion of the camera action, especially the way you ended the story with it. Watch changing your verb tense.
07/13/06
Cute entry! I liked when she was struggling with the weight of her hair dryer in her backpack and worrying about her makeup. It sounds like almost every teenage girl I know! I also liked how the ending tied in with the theme. Can't wait to read more of your entries.
GREAT creative telling!
07/19/06
I enjoyed reading your story from beginning to end. Very nice job. I too thought the camera "click" was excellent. Look forward to more of your work. God Bless!
07/20/06
Enjoyed your story. Down to earth story used to convey the message of greatness.
Amy your story was a joy to read!

Congrats on your win!
07/20/06
You certainly have a way with words. Congratulations on your well deserved win. I enjoyed this delightful read. Thanks for sharing it with us.
07/20/06
A lovely piece! Congratulations on your second place - keep sharing what God lays on your heart!