The Official Writing Challenge
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Good lesson here! You drew an apt analogy with the closet theme!

Your opening would have some nice punch if you began with the second sentence: "I could not comprehend my bossís request; it looked to be a waste of time." That way, you draw your reader in emotionally right from the start. Then you can creatively build the setting.

Have fun and keep writing!
06/26/06
Very nice. Good comparison of a closet to our souls. Nicely done :)