The Official Writing Challenge
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06/23/06
This was rich in detail and so colorful with memories! A lovely piece of days gone by. You should send it in to a place like the "Grit" or somewhere that uses this kind of writing to be published. Very nice writing. Made me see it and want to be there!
Beautiful job of description here. Almost impossible for the reader not picture him/herself in the front yard.

I was a bit puzzled by your title. Very little mention of "Old Pictures". The fond memories part is front and center.

This may be just me, but I would've liked to have seen all the senses covered more in your description--the humidity, sounds of birds, etc, crunchy grass beneath feet,and some dialogue, just to hear the southern accent/dialect, and immerse myself even more in your setting.

Again, beautiful job.
I agree about this description. It's marvelous. Keep up the good work.