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06/23/06
This was rich in detail and so colorful with memories! A lovely piece of days gone by. You should send it in to a place like the "Grit" or somewhere that uses this kind of writing to be published. Very nice writing. Made me see it and want to be there!
06/26/06
Beautiful job of description here. Almost impossible for the reader not picture him/herself in the front yard.

I was a bit puzzled by your title. Very little mention of "Old Pictures". The fond memories part is front and center.

This may be just me, but I would've liked to have seen all the senses covered more in your description--the humidity, sounds of birds, etc, crunchy grass beneath feet,and some dialogue, just to hear the southern accent/dialect, and immerse myself even more in your setting.

Again, beautiful job.
06/27/06
I agree about this description. It's marvelous. Keep up the good work.