The Official Writing Challenge
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I like Rhoda's contempory voice here, and your closing sentence is perfect. My only suggestion is to work on the paragraphing, especially in the last part--a line of white space between each speakers' dialog, please. Otherwise a fresh and interesting story!
I like this. It was easy to read and you kept Rhoda's voice all the way through. Good job. Keep writing.