The Official Writing Challenge
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06/16/06
A good message on the sufficiency of abundance, and how it can be in actions, not always things. (Needs some white space between paragraphs.)
06/18/06
This is a good reminder to us. God is always there. We just have to look to Him. God bless.
I like the way you took a story we can all relate to, and transitioned into a valuable teaching!

Most readers will begin to make the connection from parable to lesson as soon as you begin the transition, so to maintain the 'sparkle,' you might want to trim down the amount of words you spend on the lesson at the end.

Nice entry--keep writing!