The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed your method of teaching your child of God's abundance. I think your title stole the suspense of your story giving it away too soon though. Good life lesson. I have little ones too and will apply your advice of creative teaching. Thanks and keep writing. Stef.
06/16/06
This is well done and is a good lesson to show rather than tell about abundance. Thanks.
06/18/06
Daniel has a good teacher. Nice story. Consider line spacing between paragraphs an especially between lines of character dialog. It will make it read a lot smoother for the reader.