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Yep--God is stronger than Jack. I felt the yearning your character had for a drink despite the hell he knew it would bring. And I liked that he prayed and found peace.
Overall, I thought this was good. You had some grammatical errors, and you also changed tenses briefly in the middle from present to past.
That being said, your ending was good. I felt his peace and gratefulness to God. Nice work.
Descriptive and written with a good flow. I almost expected him to dump the alcohol down the drain.
I loved this short, brief and to the point entry! It says it all! However, one suggestion to make it more reader friendly - spaces between the paragraphs would improve it immensely. Very well written! Good job.